[Migrantjusticedocumentary] Almost picture lock

Sun Oct 26 13:39:28 PDT 2014

Heyo -

I watched it through again a couple of times and I wanna say that I'm
really happy about how this looks. Thank you both Boban and Danielle for
putting so much work into porst-post-post produfirstction and for
respecting the ideas/structure that we had already come up with as a group.
The last version is super tight and the transitions between sections was
really well smoothed out. Anyway, happy this project is coming into
completion and excited to see it online.

As for comments, only minor ones:

   - love the new title placement at the beginning.
   - there are long pauses where sound cuts abruptly throughout (but I'm
   assuming that will be covered by music mix?)
   - most people's faces in intv. are over exposed and over contrasted
   (especially Ben, Amanda, and Harsha)
   - love noe's b-roll and the new interview in general
   - 5:58 - Noe colours seem different from the first time we see him on
   the screen
   - 6:38 - b-roll mural v. blue
   - 7:09 - roz history is choppy in sound.
   - 9:20 - amanda is described as indigenous organizer both times she
   appears --
      - I think we could introduce her here as "Turtle clan, Onondowa'ga
      Haudenosaunee" & indigenous organizer in the second one.
   - 9:20 I would keep the part where she says "people often seek migration
   here bcz they don't have a choice bcz their territories are beig destroyed"
   - pre-lude to "canada is not only a colonial"....
   - 11:04 - Not very smooth b-roll - (there is a portion in that same
   cliptowards the end that is smoother i think)
   - 13:12 & 14:30: love the music transition
   - The transition to Sandra story is a bit abrupt i think - would be into
   replacing roz intro to woman shelters and cbsa/police abuse towards those
   - 22:53 - weird b-roll sequence -- same spot twice, looks confusing
   - 30:00 -- this (and the other too) graph looks awesome
   - 34:27 -- looks blue
   - I personally like the quotes in the credits

That is it on my side.

Let me know if this is not clear, and if there is need for any of us to
help in what is left to be done.

thank to you all,
Nico

On Fri, Oct 24, 2014 at 9:43 AM, Boban Chaldovich <
contact at bobanchaldovich.com> wrote:

> Hey folks,
> here's the tighter, almost finished version. The thing that need to be
> resolved are the outro credits.
> Yes or no to quotes being a part of the credits? There's nowhere else to
> put them.
> Julie and I will be working on the music next week, then Kyle will take on
> the sound mix.
>
>
> https://k.bobanchaldovich.com/owncloud/public.php?service=files&t=09b5f37d8a1353605ad34eec41e6f0cc
>
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> On Oct 22, 2014, at 1:28, Nicolas Quiazua <nicolas.quiazua at gmail.com>
> wrote:
>
> just watched it through and it still looks great. the resistance section
> is much better and editing is mostly clean!! :)
> will be watching it again tomorrow and send more specific feedback.
> Also  happy that our indiegogo reached its goal!
> Nico
>
> On Sun, Oct 19, 2014 at 1:57 PM, Danielle Holyk <danielle.holyk at gmail.com>
> wrote:
>
>> Thanks for the feedback Cat. that's exactly what we need. and we'll be
>> reworking the subs!
>> for the credits. can we all try to go through this and update it .. will
>> be easiest!
>>
>> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1mOJYE9TjyGg81VIETOCoYT_Rlk_WxnnhHMYfozLZYfw/edit
>> and the gogo is getting close. just 30some hours left and i think we can
>> do it so lets give it one last push! personal messages work best!
>>
>> On Fri, Oct 17, 2014 at 5:41 PM, Catherine Kendler <
>> catherinekendler at gmail.com> wrote:
>>
>>> Subtitles don't count, right? They go in after picture lock...? I've
>>> included some subtitle comments here partly for my own reference...
>>>
>>> Great job guys, this looks awesome. Comments below are mostly about
>>> timing and text boxes.
>>>
>>> 11:34 cut off Carmelo instead of at 11:36 *(subtitle)*
>>>
>>> 12:10 the (info about PRRA) is missing *(subtitle)*
>>>
>>> 14:38 The Harper government [has] detained... (cut 'has' since it's up
>>> till 2013)
>>>
>>> 16:38 the "Protest in front of CSIS..." info bar should be left up 2
>>> more seconds
>>>
>>> 17:05 I don't think it's necessary to repost Robyn's info bar, in an
>>> effort to keep things from getting too cluttered
>>>
>>> 18:03 Ben's subtitles start to all be off-timed *(subtitle)*
>>>
>>> 18:07 Ben's info bar is too long. You could cut out "Member of the"
>>> since it's implied. Even with this edit I don't think it's possible to read
>>> both the info bar and the subtitles, so maybe the bar could show up at
>>> 18:11 and the clip could be drawn out a bit when he pauses after saying
>>> "survivre".
>>>
>>> 21:44 be called ON to... *(subtitle)*
>>>
>>> 22:30 I would give the stat about public schooling another second on the
>>> screen
>>>
>>> 23:54 I think you should cut Carmelo off a second earlier so that we
>>> don't see his bird-neck movement which looks kind of silly and takes away
>>> from the strength of his comment
>>>
>>> 33:15 With the support OF...
>>>
>>> *(subtitle)*
>>> 33:16 If you want to include info about Sandrine's education it should
>>> show up at 11:54, that's a good spot since there's more time then, and this
>>> second time we see her no info bar is necessary.
>>>
>>> 36:20 Careful with the Thank-you's--a couple of names appear twice.
>>>
>>> I suggest putting the credits either before or after the final comments
>>> from Sandrine, Evelia, etc. With the subtitles it looks too busy and you
>>> can't read both at once. If you don't like the idea, then at least give
>>> each credit a couple of seconds more, so that they run all the way to the
>>> end of Sandra's final comment or even a few seconds after.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> On Fri, Oct 17, 2014 at 8:38 AM, Boban Chaldovich <
>>> contact at bobanchaldovich.com> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Hey folks,
>>>> Danielle and I worked on getting this done, so check it out
>>>> <https://k.bobanchaldovich.com/owncloud/public.php?service=files&t=4876f31103ed41ab0be33f9b96d95ed9> and
>>>> send us your feedback on the almost picture locked version of the movie.
>>>> We didn't put the latest music, but this is pretty much where it will
>>>> be, in terms of the edits.
>>>> Send us your feedback asap, so we can finalize this.
>>>> Thanks.
>>>>
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>>>>
>>>> Boban Chaldovich
>>>> bobanchaldovich.com
>>>> +1 514 706 3080
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